Submitted for The Advanced Critique Folder.

Category: Prose

Genre: Medieval Fantasy

Rating: R for graphic violence, Gore, and Language

What i need help with:

Grammar, Punctuation, misspelled words.

did i go overboard on the descriptions or not enough? do i need to describe something in more detail or hang back on the descriptions?

Special Requests: none.

Who i Critiqued for: N/A